i think your writing sounds great, i can really see in my head what’s going on. keep working on it!
Chelsea Ellen Said,
Wow, that was really good.
I got a visual of everything I was reading.
But you do need to get your point across about what the idea of the story will be.
animalibera Said,
Amazing. I could just imagine it. Also, I’ve been there before, but you still managed to keep me engaged by looking at Broadway in a new light. Very cool- you’re an awesome writer.
I <3 My alto sax! Said,
This is actually really amazing!!! Just one thing I would change, “vruming” is supposed to be “vrooming” or something like that. It just looks different with vruming…
Sam Said,
Wow- you actually described everything really well without sounding like a total goof. I don’t like it when people try too hard to be descriptive and it sounds unnatural or lacking character. But you didn’t do that at all- you must know what you’re doing!
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i think your writing sounds great, i can really see in my head what’s going on. keep working on it!
Wow, that was really good.
I got a visual of everything I was reading.
But you do need to get your point across about what the idea of the story will be.
Amazing. I could just imagine it. Also, I’ve been there before, but you still managed to keep me engaged by looking at Broadway in a new light. Very cool- you’re an awesome writer.
This is actually really amazing!!! Just one thing I would change, “vruming” is supposed to be “vrooming” or something like that. It just looks different with vruming…
Wow- you actually described everything really well without sounding like a total goof. I don’t like it when people try too hard to be descriptive and it sounds unnatural or lacking character. But you didn’t do that at all- you must know what you’re doing!