Ok
I will be blunt
I got halfway through it and felt like I was getting a lecture.
wow.. you said blunt too.. ok
we are on the same wavelength but this is not really interesting .. It lost me and I could not continue.. a good poem should hold your reader hostage.
Rosa Said,
I loved the message portrayed in this poem and I agree with it wholeheartedly. However, at times, I did loose focus and kinda felt like I was being lectured at; at first I even thought that the narrator might have been telling her to wash her hair, but I like to think otherwise – that he wants her to be natural and free. To love what natural, God-given beauty has been bestowed upon her. For that, truly, is the most beautiful of all.
I laughed when I read the last stanza. Cute.
Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt Said,
Have a Star !
Sometimes a Wannabe needs a lecture..:)
Whoever she is… wrap this piece
inside a box of Bon Bons
and place it in her locker.
Comments
Ok
I will be blunt
I got halfway through it and felt like I was getting a lecture.
wow.. you said blunt too.. ok
we are on the same wavelength but this is not really interesting .. It lost me and I could not continue.. a good poem should hold your reader hostage.
I loved the message portrayed in this poem and I agree with it wholeheartedly. However, at times, I did loose focus and kinda felt like I was being lectured at; at first I even thought that the narrator might have been telling her to wash her hair, but I like to think otherwise – that he wants her to be natural and free. To love what natural, God-given beauty has been bestowed upon her. For that, truly, is the most beautiful of all.
I laughed when I read the last stanza. Cute.
Have a Star !
Sometimes a Wannabe needs a lecture..:)
Whoever she is… wrap this piece
inside a box of Bon Bons
and place it in her locker.